Term 4 Goal

My goal for next term is to try and reach my School Journals (instead of Junior Journals) for reading if I don't reach it that is ok. Next term I want to put more of my learning on my blog I really want to put a voicethread on my blog because I want to share my subjects with people and they can put there voicethread  message on it to, that would be really cool I also want to put the 'like, cool and interesting' tabs on my blog for people to tick.

Writing-Describing a character

 

I think he is of Alice in Wonderland. He looks a bit evil he has lots of things on his hat it looks like he went to a rubbish bin and took things out and stuck them on his hat the
 smell is terribly awful. His nails look like mud has been smudged. He looks like a clown with a dirty tea cup. His eyebrows look like hair going up on the side it is so long it is like sticks poniting upwards.He can hypotnitise you and he will make you do stuff.

THIS IS MY DRAFT PIECE OF WRITING PLEASE LEAVE A COMMENT TO TELL ME HOW I CAN IMPROVE MY WRITING. 

Writing-Describing a Setting

WALT: Describe a setting using lots of adjectives to make it interesting for the reader.


This house looks like a humungus building with an ordinary house on the side it looks like a rocket on the side geting reading to blast off. This house is in the city heaps of people are walking past and looking at it like they didn't know what it was it. A rich man owns this house because it is big and it looks like it would of cost a millon dollars it looks like a humungus piece of chase in the shape of a square.The windows look like a bar of delicous chocolate. The floor is like a mars bar split into a square.


This is my draft piece of wirteing please leave a comment to tell me how I can improve my writing