Tuesday, September 18, 2012

Writing-Describing a character


 

I think he is of Alice in Wonderland. He looks a bit evil he has lots of things on his hat it looks like he went to a rubbish bin and took things out and stuck them on his hat the
 smell is terribly awful. His nails look like mud has been smudged. He looks like a clown with a dirty tea cup. His eyebrows look like hair going up on the side it is so long it is like sticks poniting upwards.He can hypotnitise you and he will make you do stuff.

THIS IS MY DRAFT PIECE OF WRITING PLEASE LEAVE A COMMENT TO TELL ME HOW I CAN IMPROVE MY WRITING. 

2 comments:

  1. To Rhiannon,
    I love the language you have used like terribly awful, smudged and hypnotise! What do you think he would hypnotise people to do?
    From Mrs Head

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  2. Dear Mrs Head
    He will hypnotise you to do his jobs that wiil be terribly awful.From Rhiannon.

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