WALT: Describe a setting using lots of adjectives to make it interesting for the reader.
This house looks like a humungus building with an ordinary house on the side it looks like a rocket on the side geting reading to blast off. This house is in the city heaps of people are walking past and looking at it like they didn't know what it was it. A rich man owns this house because it is big and it looks like it would of cost a millon dollars it looks like a humungus piece of chase in the shape of a square.The windows look like a bar of delicous chocolate. The floor is like a mars bar split into a square.
This is my draft piece of wirteing please leave a comment to tell me how I can improve my writing
To Rhiannon,
ReplyDeleteI like how you have looked at all the walls in this picture and described it like the small squares that make up the bigger square in a block of chocolate. It does look like it could be in the city. Could you describe what that city is like a bit more for us to paint a picture in our minds. Is the whole city got slightly unusual buildings or is this the only one?
Who might live in this upside down house?
How did it come to sit on top of the other building?
From Mrs Head
Dear Mrs Head
ReplyDeleteThanks for leaveing a commet.
This city looks like a a humgus schoop of Ice-cream.This other building looks like a sponge that is just about to scrub the car.A rich man owns this house because it is huge and it looks like it would cost a lot of money.
From Rhiannon.
To Rhiannon,
ReplyDeleteWhat makes you think the city is like a schlopp of ice-cream? Is the upside down house like the cherry on top?
Well done Rhiannon you are thinking more about what the picture shows you and describing it. I look forward to reading more of your descriptive writing.
From Mrs Head
Dear Mrs Head
ReplyDeleteIt looks like a big schlopp of Ice_cream because the building is really big it just makes me want to eat it. Mrs Head it does't look like a cherry on top woops my bad but it does lok like a big box on the side. From Rhiannon.